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i edited one of my best stories. would anyone be willing to check it out?

spinning-plates (January 25th, 2003, 9:45 pm)

it doesn't really fit tightly into any genre, but i guess i'd call it modern fantasy. it is a redone version of one of my all time favourite things i've written. there are two sequels, but this one works well as a stand alone, too, since it concludes itself. i plan to make this into a huge plot if i can ever find out where to go from the end of part III.

here ya go:

www.deviantart.com/deviation/1143175

i'm not asking you to read it all, just this one part if you're up to it, since the old one was pretty well liked and not many people have told what they thought of this and i'm pretty proud of it - don't let that stop you from being honest, however, because that is the only way to truly help.

Thanks ahead, guys.

i edited one of my best stories. would anyone be willing to check it out?

spinning-plates (February 4th, 2003, 5:37 am)

I'm going to put the sequels in my oevure when I get them edited.

I'm not going to put in the zine, because they've been on da for so long, but I've got some other plans for what to put in there.

This is for us?

cruise (February 4th, 2003, 9:07 pm)

SWEET :D

I got about half-way through before my recent linux/network fun, and didn't get a chance to finsih, but what I'd read rocked immensely.

Not asking to read it all..?

Hellkeepa (February 5th, 2003, 3:10 am)

HELLo!

You don't have to ask us to read it, in fact we'd be offended if you told us not to read it! ;-)

I can't comment fully upon it, but it was VERY sweet! I can't do anything but look foreward until the next episode. :-D

Happy fraggin'!

Not asking to read it all..?

BlacklightResponsive (May 15th, 2003, 9:00 pm)

Hey, I read through what you had up on deviant and I'd say what you have written is very compelling. It kept me interested and I wanted to know what would happen next. It seemed to drag around 2/3 of the way through, I think around there you should try and add more focus to scene and features. Maybe some metaphore to help give people a clearer picture of where they're at. I can feel the importance of the woods as they enter, but I really can't see it as well as I'd like. Your emotion is consuming but the physical description gets a bit left behind. A wonderful piece none the less. I'd be interested in reading through all of it. And as a friend of mine points out relentlessly, "anyways" is not a word ;)

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