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spera rewrite (almost)

Gyroscope (February 25th, 2003, 7:01 pm)

reading over spera, there were some good ideas, but poor execution. so i'm writing a new long series to try to salvage those ideas. the sci fi elements are gone completely, which is why i'm submitting it to deviantart. that and the story is 90% different.

it's called 'set me a blaze' and is a dark comedy that is planned as three parts. the first part is complete, and can be found here:

www.deviantart.com/deviation/1376786

feedback welcome fo sho, else i wouldn't be posting it.

Edit by Narain: Added [ url ] tags to the link.

Huh?

cruise (February 25th, 2003, 9:17 pm)

I'll hcekc it out when I have a chance...but what's happening to Spera? Having published the first two parts in our first issues, and having the third part ready and waiting, it would be a shame to not finish it off...or are you completely abandoning it now?

Huh?

Gyroscope (February 26th, 2003, 1:55 am)

*strokes chin* abandonment, eh?

actually, it ends in part three. apparently the ending only makes sense to me though. damn i put a lot of time into that story.

*adds to bookmarks*

Narainsbrain (February 26th, 2003, 3:00 am)

Will read later, when time permits.

*adds to bookmarks*

Gyroscope (March 2nd, 2003, 4:01 am)

i've gotten 5 favs on it, which must mean something, probably along the lines of 'stop doing the stuff that sucks'.

Very good, although...

Hellkeepa (March 2nd, 2003, 12:38 pm)

HELLo!

Hehe, you always seem to forget the critisism, don't you, Narainsbrain? ;-

Anyway, the story was very strong in it's pictures, driving home the emotions hard. However, I get it was a bit too "quick" in certain places, so that you didn't get the proper feel for the setting and situations. This is especually so with the ending, where he killed Amy.

One last thing I have to say, though: I prefer Spera. :-D

Happy fraggin'!

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