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Flowerwingness (February 19th, 2004, 7:22 pm)

This story is for my graduation project thing, or rather a senior project. I rewrote this about three times, and still dont like how it is now, but I have to present in Apirl so I dont have all that much time.

www.deviantart.com/deviation/5345672/

Would really care for comments and what not. I know there is alot of spelling errors, but for the most part thats not what Im concerned with. Its the story itself since no one has really said anything about it only pointing out the spelling mistakes u.u

not to forget that theres a bit of mature content in it..

cruise (February 22nd, 2004, 1:18 pm)

dA is playing up, so I'll post my comments here.

I really can't find any fault apart from the spelling errors - the descriptions and metaphors are excellent, and the story flows well, with good pace. I don't see why you think it's so bad. What is it you don't like about it?

Flowerwingness (February 22nd, 2004, 11:45 pm)

Im not all that sure, I just dont like it to much, I mean I like it better than the first one I started the same as this story..But Im just not sure where I can take it. I dont have any plots worked out yet

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cruise (February 24th, 2004, 8:11 am)

now that;sa little different.

What do you want from the story? Do you want it to encourage or create a feeling of despair? Uplifting or sorrowful? A brave victory against all the odds, or an example of the futility of humankind#?

etc.

Once you have settled on the overall point of the story, your reason for writing, then it may help to give you a better idea of where to take the plot.

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