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The Lonely Road

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Don't ask where this came from... Basically an emotional picture, inspired by the feel of "Carbon (Instrumental Version)" by VNV Nation. I like this, though it's really short, and not technically genre fiction at all. Don't kill me, ok? :)

It needs an image, I think. In fact - I REALLY like this. Get this song, and read this (REALLY, REALLY slowly) while it's playing. Wow.

Sometimes I amaze myself. :)

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Lonely the road stretches onwards, the dust a record of blood and tears. The sound of weary footsteps echo in the memories of time, tired armies and dying men traveling the dreary length. Where are they going? Where did they come from? Why are they here?

Are they heroes? Or are they cowards, fleeing their comrades in face of opposition? No matter. Here, on the road, all men are the same. Riding, crawling, walking - what is different? Each lives or dies, eats and breaths, rots and stinks in it's turn.

What matter the lofty goals, the proud honor or craven desires that drove them? Is it not enough that they breath? They were made, and are, and die, as men have done in ages past - and will do in time yet to come.

Lament them, if you will; Praise them, should you so desire - but remember they are but mortal men, whose span is as a fleeting breath, fog upon a cold glass. The grave is no respecter of person, rich and poor, strong and weak, honorable and dishonorable. All live, all die. And all who walk this road are still yet the same.

Come, weary mortal. Join them. Thou hast known of life, learn now of death, and be content.

cruise (July 27th, 2002, 10:58 am)

Not original thoughts, but very very cool certainly :P

Hmm...Where can you go with this?

Eldritch (July 28th, 2002, 1:24 am)

I like it. Not too original , but yes, you can find it a place in some OTHER story :D


Narainsbrain (August 23rd, 2002, 4:32 pm)

i like it, and i don't care that it doesn't make a story. if you do manage to fit it in somewhere, good, but it's nice like this too.

maybe if you know a graphics d00d at dA you can get him to make a gloomy wallpaper to go with this and inscribe the text in, something like art poetry...

sorry, the idea just came to me. like you think in music, i think in pictures. ;)

btw, i love the last paragraph.


Semirrahge (August 24th, 2002, 1:48 am)

Trust you to come up with a rave review, mate. :) And, no... I actually use music to create an emotion with which I then make an image. Except the problem is that its usually a moving one. :)

Anyhow, I'm glad you liked it - it's one of my personal favorites, and yeah, that sentance amazes me with it's coolness. :)

Ahh... Really good

Siedhr (October 17th, 2002, 3:47 pm)

I think it a really beautiful piece of writing... the imagery it creates, the feelings it transmits... it seems it carries a very interesting and sensitive, yet powerful story... I can see it strech behind it, much like the road itself.

but it has enough in it to stand on its own.

very well written, minor flaws though, easily corrected I think (like "what is different?"-unclear sentence, in my opinion)

and about the originality... what is that? it's a short piece with no narration, what kind of originality is expected from it?

I found it simple and honest... it doesn't attempt to strike the reader's mind with some well-researched, often fake, "originality". It let me dream away from it, it appealed to my subconscious.

I can't wait for a longer piece.


oh yeah....

drd (March 24th, 2003, 11:09 pm)

introduction to vnv nation, thank you very much.

Definately fits the music. Well writen and beautifully done.


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